The Sea Girl Poem by Beach Girl

The Sea Girl

Rating: 4.5


When I was just a little girl
They brought me to the sea
I waded out as waves unfurled
Their salty gifts on me

Seaweed, shells and whole sand dollars
Were strewn along the shores
Each a gem of ocean wonders
Formed on soft sea floors

As years flew by and she grew tall
She never lost her passion
Most nights she'd hear the ocean call
And dreamt of wild waves crashing

The sea girl couldn't shake the call
Salt water coursed her veins
Returning to the old sea wall
She felt her heart unchained

Miles and miles of endless sea
It took her breath away
The blue, the blue, oh it does scheme
To drive one quite insane

Thunderous and angry waves
They threw themselves ashore
The aqua hues grew dark and grey
The rain drops she ignored

She ran down to the water
And lay upon the sand
The pleasure that this brought her
Caused rain and tears to blend

The drumming of the thunder
Became a distant song
Soon there was just a murmur
The raging storm was gone

When she awoke and gazed about
She found herself entwined
Seaweed and shells her form did tout
Gems from the sea, her finds

Thursday, June 20, 2013
Topic(s) of this poem: sea,seaside
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Kim Barney 23 March 2015

I really like this poem, although I have to agree with Bri Edwards about the use of the word FLOUT. It doesn't really make sense as used here. Also, in the second line of verse seven, you should use LAY instead of LAID. Sorry, I can't help it. I used to be an English teacher. Great work, however! Keep writing.

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Cowboy Ron Williams 10 January 2024

I see that she has made both changes that you suggested. Good work, former English teacher!

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Bri Edwards 24 January 2015

some of my favorites: Each a gem of ocean wonders Formed on soft sea floors .....wild waves crashing' The blue, the blue, oh it does scheme To drive one quite insane Caused rain and tears to blend Seaweed and shells her form did flout Gems from the sea, her finds ============================= i HAD to look up flout to decide if i liked it. i'd like its synonym disregard in the poem even more, even though it doesn't rhyme with about. - - - - - - - - flout flout/ verb verb: flout; 3rd person present: flouts; past tense: flouted; past participle: flouted; gerund or present participle: flouting openly disregard (a rule, law or convention) . these same companies still flout basic ethical practices synonyms: defy, refuse to obey, disobey, break, violate, fail to comply with, fail to observe, contravene, infringe, breach, commit a breach of, transgress against; ignore, disregard countless retailers flout the law by selling cigarettes to children antonyms: observe archaic mock; scoff. the women pointed and flouted at her BUT THAT'S THE ONLY THING WHICH KEPT ME FROM THOROUGHLY ENJOYING THE POEM, and i had decided to send it to MyPoemList even before i finished reading. i did notice a switch from first person narration to third person narration, but i could live with that, and i might even like it. yes, i like it! - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - this is a great poem! the rhymes i will call imperfect, but i liked them very much. there was some way words rhymed while not exactly rhyming. very nice. if you had tried to rhyme with what i would call exact rhyming, the poem would probably NOT be SO GOOD! bri :)

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Kim Barney 23 November 2015

Bri, originally she had LAID in verse seven. I suggested that she should change it to LAY, which she did. So the way it is now is perfect, not wrong at all.

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Fanny Fransijn 25 September 2013

Beautiful poem...! I am moved and have to read it again and again.

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Cowboy Ron Williams 10 January 2024

I love this poem! I have given it five stars and made it one of my favorites!

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Beautiful. So very endearingly emotional. But the transit from First Person to Third Person is left unexplained…

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Varsha M 28 December 2020

This is beautiful poetic expression of beautiful expression vof emotional bond to sea. A very magnificent piece full of experience stupendous. Well penned.

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David Wood 28 December 2020

A lovely poem, I felt I was there too beautiful use of words.

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Geeta Radhakrishna Menon 22 February 2020

What a lovely poem! The sea has so much of treasure to offer the world. A mesmerizing world full of colourful sea shells, sea weeds, gems and pearls. We must have a keen desire to see the wonders of the vast ocean and eyes that can spot these wonderful gifts of nature. Loved your poem, dear beach Girl......10

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