The Move Poem by Barbara Nixon

The Move

Rating: 5.0


The Move

Biting, squalid, pitch hued November morn,
concrete pavement, hopscotch feet
dancing merrily o'er white chalked squares
not a care but for the moment,
haven of innocence and juvenile dares.

A wearisome mother in step with petulant brother
toting boxes and cases o'er sleet battered cobbles
clutching fiercely paltry worldly treasures
expressionless faces, resigned, automatons,
far cry from habitual good natured squabbles.

Jess, the old mutt, still chained to the fence
a token last protest from a canine suffragette,
liberated, now bouncing into the rear of the van
stacked high with all manner of household contraption
on threadbare old blankets his caninity now rests.

Three pairs of eyes peer fixedly through the windows
as the van moves cantankerously along the well worn road
old house standing stoically amongst its companion stragglers
like sporadic teeth in a gaping decayed mouth
mother sheds a tear and brother blasts the radio to lighten the load.

by Barb

POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
This is the remembrances of a child moving home. As a child i was blissfully unaware about the hardships of life, as children usually are; cocooned in their childhood innocence and carefree abandon. Conversely other family members took the move very badly and it was a gut wrenching experience for them, sad and quite traumatic. But the new abode proved to be a happy home, so everything worked out for the best.
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Saadat Tahir 08 January 2013

you have managed to create some musicality without recourse to a rhyme pattern...and that is quite an achievement in its own great similitude... old house standing stoically amongst its companion stragglers like sporadic teeth in a gaping decayed mouth beaut word pic Biting, squalid, pitch hued November morn, concrete pavement, hopscotch feet targeted and lucid well written

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Owain Glyn 08 January 2013

You've captured all the unrest that a move can inflict on different members of a family, some hurt, some not really understanding, some indifferent, but the poor old mutt, ohhhhh.

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