as the nights come and the days go
i relize more and more how you are low
and yet as i try to healp
it seems that i only make it worse
i whud stop healping but i cant
and yet i relize more all you want is someone who cares
so tell me now whut has you down
for this shal be the last night you spend alone
You have done a fine job here..great beginnings..very well done..thank you..iip :)
I like it very much. Umm.... had a couple of typos.... try to not rush when typing. I know I make mistakes as well. Though very good point. Thanks for telling me to read this.
Well written, not much to say in the field of criticism, possibly pour some more out. it's a great deep poem and placed well with others like it
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
nice....i like it alot......