The Fluvial Mind Poem by Rishit Desai
The Fluvial Mind
If the path before you is clear,
It may be your eyes but definitely another's mind;
If you know what you are looking for,
Then that is all you will ever find.
Like a river has no choice but to flow,
Meet a lake, fight a mountain even though;
Disappear will it one day with a desert bend,
Or merge with the ocean in the end.
If the path before you is clear, It may be your eyes but definitely another's mind NEWTON said: if i have seen further, it is by standing on the shoulders of giants.... the poem offered a beautiful reading...
mind, river, flow. good expression. great feeling and great poem.
the poem, i think tells us about the various choices or path we take in our life, we can either disappear without leaving a mark in this now, without leaving stones unturned, or we can make something worth of our life and the world just like the drops of river eventually form the whole ocean.
Striking and soothing. It flings the mind across a space of a renewed soul. Larger meanings, concrete feelings. Great job!
Not spectacular by any means. Poor rhyme scheme, mediocre vocabulary, lack of convincing emotion, and purposeless meaning that has no power to move readers' thoughts in any certain direction. Like a river had no choice but to flow is a nice line that cleanly shocks the reader as they ponder that thought taken for granted in their mind. This poem does have a nice vague, almost morgue impression left upon my mind. It could be vastly improved, but yet already has a good start on being something worthwhile, which could be said of almost all poetry.
............very nicely written....I was kind of disappointed to see this poem end.....congratulations on member poem of the day...
After a long time seen new born poem fluvial mind lovely very nice enjoyed mind with soul
Beautiful poem. Yes it takes a long time before most of us realize how our paths have been chalked out way before we knew any thing. enjoyed reading.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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4/19/2024 7:46:33 AM # 1.0.0.1119
Great, great poem! what a contend! i really like it.