Barry Donegan

Rookie (Nashville, TN)

Take Four


there's this one poem
i rewrote three times:
its called i let her in and shes bleeding all over the place
its this pre-
pubescent
mid-pubescent
post-pubescent
d istorted rage little boy perverted menstruation metaphor
about this chick katie when i was a KID
about her in a wizard of ozz dorothy dress eating cake - very through the looking glass
ish looking room
thing
and the cake, shes eating it and
shes menstruating under the table and it just keeps rising like this flood
of blood of her distorted womb
and shes eating cake, which is PLACENTA in latin
because see, i was and am and will always be obsessed with latin, phrasing and word order,
etymology and words
and she was eating PLACENTA
and there was this flood of her menstruation
and i keep rewriting this poem
constantly, one of two poems i keep rewriting
like i always lose my poems
DAMN its a good one.
GOT to rewrite that one.
usually it loses someting each time,
but this particular one just
gets
better
each
time.

Submitted: Sunday, August 12, 2007
Edited: Monday, March 28, 2011

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