'Swing' Poem by Nathan Coppedge

'Swing'

Rating: 5.0


Under the preponderant clouds
wishing mist on the outskirts of cities
The crowd roves and raves
Speaking with the hearts of dead men

Wheezy with their instruments,
the black satin leaves them standing on
their own
besmirched with a sticky forgetfulness
wondering how it turned.

And, in another room
The men awake, as though just
remembering
A long voyage to the center of a thin
rope
Somewhere in the clouds

Friday, March 21, 2014
Topic(s) of this poem: nature
POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
One of my best attempts at professional poetry... whatever that means...
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Nathan Coppedge 01 June 2014

Thank you, Michelle, again for your comment.

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Michelle Claus 01 June 2014

Evocative. It creates a sense of hovering for the reader, and reduction. But maybe the final stanza is uplifting?

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Nathan Coppedge 22 March 2014

Thank you so much (Re: Reyvrex) .

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Reyvrex Questor Reyes 22 March 2014

Such an abstract poem. Enjoyable to read.

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