Sun Burnt Me..... Poem by Dulakshi Wakista

Sun Burnt Me.....

Rating: 3.9


I walked to the door step
It was a sunny day
Uncle Johnny called me outside
I ran and passed the pine tree
Sun shimmered
Uncle Johnny waited for me...
Oh no! bloody tyrant sun rays
Touched my hand and face
I couldn't face up to it
My face turned red
Oh gosh! Sun burnt me....
My heart drowned, full of
Sadness and unshed tears....
I was excited!
I couldn't bear my wounds’ pain
O thou saddest day!
I wonder why the Sun
Burned me.....
Gloomed and doomed my life
Sun scorched me
Left its deadly marks on me
Aimed its rays to destroy me
Is this my life fate?

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Akram Awadat 24 February 2010

good poem, well done i like it

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Louie -Love & Peace- Levy 24 February 2010

The 'Sun' is blameless, life would not exist on Earth without it. Such as 'fire' warns to not touch, so your foolishness to expose your self unprotected to it is worded to blame its beneficiial power. You offer no profile as to age or self interests, etc. Your Immaturity does reflect and having given some thought and time, you will will have more self insight of the world and life in general

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Iron Panda 23™ 24 February 2010

another awesome write! !

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Almedia Knight-Oliver 26 February 2010

Like your poem...'sun Burnt Me' the metaphor of being burnt by the sun can be scorching. good write a 10

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Anne Unknown 26 February 2010

very well written. you've used metaphors which i like in the poems. to see the sun as fire....well done. keep it up

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Guzin Balpetek 18 September 2015

interesting poem, but I like it

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Afzal Shauq 05 June 2010

O thou saddest day! I wonder why the Sun Burned me..... Gloomed and doomed my life Sun scorched me Left its deadly marks on me Aimed its rays to destroy me Is this my life fate? its really a well written poem with innovative way of expression.. the best is your idea and expression and the way you wrote is very much poetic and soul feeling..lovely poem...10/10 ++++++++

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D H 01 April 2010

Tragically beautiful.........How the story goes, in a rythmical pattern, going along of how the burnt thee.! 10 awesomeness

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Gita Ashok 01 April 2010

Hi Dulakshi: Enjoyed reading this poem thoroughly. A simple theme has been handled so well by you. Amazing! Keep on writing.

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Theresa Walker 30 March 2010

BEAUTIFUL POEM LIFE IS SUM TIMES PAINFUL WELL WRITTEN MY FRIEND

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