Steps Of Life Poem by Brittney Miller

Steps Of Life

Rating: 4.5


One step
Two step
Back one step

It seems every time
You get a little ahead
Life gives you
Swift kick in the rear end

That sets you back and
It seams at times
Impossible to move ahead
And what is there for you to do

Set back and forget
Or get up and fight
With a smile
You’ll do alright

One step forward
Two step forward
1/2 step backward

Gather your weapons to fight
Family for support
Friends for comfort
A smile to hide your secrets

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Edmund Wong 16 February 2010

I love the idea of this poem, about how life kicks you back (though if kicked in the rear end you should go forward right?) . I hope you don't mind me giving you some of my opinions as to how to improve this poem: generally you shouldn't end a line with 'and'; why not change 1/2 to english? 'a smile to hide your secrets' seems an awkward ending to the last stanza and the poem, why not end it on a more positive note, such as one to the effect of 'a smile to stun Life(Fate) aback'?

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