Sonnet Vii- I Carved Your Name On My Heart Poem by Yash Shinde

Sonnet Vii- I Carved Your Name On My Heart

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My beats ceased
When you left me alone……………………
My heart cried
In a monotonous tone………………………..

Conveying the state
Of my heart to thee…………………….
Come back my soul
Heartily I plea…………………….

I searched for you
In the roses and dews…………………..
I wandered through the gardens of love,
Just for a little clue……………………

And in grief of being separated apart, in my body I plunged your love's dart…………………
And carved your beautiful name in my still heart……………………………….


Copyright © Yash Shinde 2012

Thursday, October 18, 2012
Topic(s) of this poem: love hurts
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Karen Sinclair 18 October 2012

I cannot believe such a young mind has such a well rounded vision on the world! this is gorgeous yash... it really is....i hope you don't mind but to me where the flow is so perfect and easy to follow (not all poetry need be easy to feel the flow) but this to me is one of them... the 3rd stanza, last line has too many syllables... maybe dropp (little) ... or swop (to get) and replace with (for) Obviously this is just my reaction to this write and others may have a different opinion....karen

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Accassa Stokes 26 October 2012

Beautiful, I like this one sir :)

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As you have carved 'your name' on your heart, it is sure to bleed for some time and the beats will be louder. Let this separation tone your longing and upgrade the thought plank further. If the food of love is suffering, every lover must love on...

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Guy Lip-more 29 October 2012

Loved this, very good write.......

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Raihana Abdul Jabbar 30 October 2012

Awesome imagination.. Loved the images you created with roses, dews and garden.. :) Lovely!

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B. V. Dahlen 27 September 2015

Beautiful. More More More

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Hans Vr 30 November 2014

Superb love poem, moving the reader in a big way.

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Tadasha Tripathy 30 May 2014

Simply wow! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !

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Shahzia Batool 15 May 2014

very good write up...may i suggest something? if you leave thinking about sonnet here, then you can modify the couplet into the triplet, And in grief of being separated apart, in my body I plunged your love's dart And carved your beautiful name in my still heart but it's a humble suggestion being the student of poetry myself...

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Lovely poem! It's beautiful! Showing passion. Amazing! (:

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