So Poem by Indira Renganathan

So

Rating: 5.0


Obscene mortals on scene
Adept at betrayal
Off scene goodness off seen
Mortals rest sceptical
Mother queen Earth has been
Her best to be whimsical
Rebirth umpteen on wheeling
Nature 's assaying reviving trial
Unseen Lord off scene
Not yet at self-portrayal

Friday, December 11, 2009
Topic(s) of this poem: social,spiritual
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Kesav Easwaran 11 December 2009

Symbolic write...dual meaning any where inside? very intelligently composed...and on the last two lines- i must quote Bhagavat Gita- 'Yadha Yadha Hi Dharmasya' and the rest of that Sloka...10

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Indira Babbellapati 20 December 2009

let's wait for the day...but i think this creator is an artist of different sorts!

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Ranjit Ravindran 11 December 2009

Its perfectly fine Ma'am. Thank you for that elaboration. Lovely write.

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Indira Renganathan 11 December 2009

evil people are adept at betrayal Good people seen off and off scene Rest of the mortals remain sceptical Mother Earth is at her best balancing Wheeling rebirths are nature's reviving trial The creator is yet to be at self portrayal ...this is on the mystery of life...is that o.k Kranti andRanjit

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Kranthi Pothineni 11 December 2009

Interesting write. Open line gave it a nice start. Nice diction. But I didn't got your third line. On whole good one.

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Ranjit Ravindran 11 December 2009

I couldn't get your intent as you intended. Can you please explain it to me ma'am?

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