Slumber Poem by John Kipling Lewis

Slumber

Rating: 3.3


Slumber, slumber, sleep eludes my soul
and physically i roll from womb to doom.

Crazy, crazy, not so lazy, but thoughts
of life are all of strife and
i am just so old.

Awake, a wake, the more i try to move
the harder it is to prove
that i'm alive.

Pain and sleep, pain and sleet,
or rain for me to watch and wonder,
who owes me for what i've done
and who pays when i'm out run?

Green, green, as a summer grass,
freshly cut and looking sharp as
razor blades or a looking glass
shattered into shards.

But where are the hopeful days,
where are those childhoods, why
do I feel so lost and...

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
K Holoholo 06 November 2007

I like how this started out and were it was going but I don't like it's ending, as it just seemed to go somewhere else all of a sudden.

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Kath Moore 05 November 2007

3. Relies on cliches. 'Green as grass' is almost textbook bad.

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Donna Robertson 05 August 2007

I have felt this despondency too. As has most, if not all of us humans. You describe it so well, that I don't want to read this poem again.

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