Treasure Island

Geetha Jayakumar

(Kerala Palakkad)

>Short Break


Is it I am running short of break?
Is it break running short of me?
Is it I am breaking it short?
Is it short breaking me?
Well break is a break
When both mixed together
They look somewhat like this
A SHORT BREAK!
Am I right?

Dear readers and poets,
I am taking short break for a while.
This poem unexpectedly came into top five poems.

Please feel free to throw any comments
I am ready to catch it smilingly! ! ! !

I am ready
Start striking!

Thank You! ! ! !

Submitted: Thursday, January 02, 2014
Edited: Thursday, January 23, 2014

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  • Ed Nigma (2/18/2014 6:47:00 PM)

    I love short breaks wish there was more of them. At first I thought this was going to be a farewell see you later on type of poem and it sort of is but it's also something different love the wordplay. Allan Gerard~ (Report) Reply

  • Geetha Jayakumar (1/27/2014 11:06:00 AM)

    Dinesh Sir, Thanks for the lovely comment. I am just thinking to keep this poem as it is...So that when ever I feel to break anyones head with my poems...... I can just refresh it again and again..... (Report) Reply

  • Dinesh Nair (1/24/2014 9:52:00 AM)

    Now, it is time, you may delete this comment Geetha. Your hibernation has come to an end. (Report) Reply

  • Jay Gandhi (1/23/2014 7:02:00 AM)

    Your first stanza works tremendously well. But the poem goes downhill from there. Constant repetition of the word break might have been done to introduce the effect of the poetic device but it hinders the smooth flow of the poem. The sound of the word BREAK jars after a point. (Report) Reply

  • Malini Kadir (1/22/2014 8:53:00 PM)

    You throw the comments
    I am ready to catch it...

    I am ready
    Start Striking.....
    liked these lines (Report) Reply

  • Lyn Paul (1/11/2014 8:10:00 AM)

    Looking forward to hearing from you soon Geetha. I hope the sun will shine on you. Keep smiling (Report) Reply

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