Bri Edwards

Bronze Star - 5,586 Points (some time ago / Earth, i believe)

Salamander...... [Nature; A Salamander (Of Course!) : Confronting Nature; Almost Short]


Among damp leaves, in our front yard,
a spotted salamander lies.
A nest of eggs it does guard....
from bugs and other eyes.
Its solitude I just have jarred.
I think for both it was a surprise.

With my finger I feel its skin;
it is cool, and still as a smooth stone.
To harm its nest would be a sin,
but I take a photo with my phone.
Then over my face there comes a grin.
I step back, leaving it alone.

What other wonders are there hid
from unseeing eyes of Man?
Though I've seen a lot since I was a kid,
if I try harder I know I can....
see much more by lifting the lid....
which covers Mother Nature's span.

Submitted: Monday, May 27, 2013
Edited: Thursday, November 13, 2014

Topic of this poem: motherhood


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Poet's Notes about The Poem

not to brag, but this may be one of my favorite creations (this poem) . i love the rhyming. we did have salamanders around the house we
just moved from and i think i did find a nest a few years ago. that
is where i lived when i wrote this.

john westlake thinks 'prying eyes' would be better than 'other eyes' and i'm inclined to agree with him, but 'other' is staying. :)
though i can never look at nature and assume it was created by a god, it is easy to see why many people cite 'nature's wonders' as evidence of God. AND to think that i can come up with this poem is also amazing but i still don't believe in God or Heaven, but DON'T tell God that!
i wrote this in Feb. but just revised it in May; it is even better now! bri edwards

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(Feb.2013)

Comments about this poem (Salamander...... [Nature; A Salamander (Of Course!) : Confronting Nature; Almost Short] by Bri Edwards )

  • Gold Star - 15,195 Points John Westlake (11/8/2014 4:43:00 PM)

    Ah salamanders. Unusual little creatures to be sure. Personally I would use prying eyes instead other eyes, but that's just me. Rhyming works here though, so it's all me (Report) Reply

    Bronze Star - 5,586 Points Bri Edwards (11/13/2014 11:26:00 PM)

    yes, prying eyes is very good, perhaps better. i like it, but the other eyes will stay. thanks. :)

  • Gold Star - 7,960 Points Daniel Brick (7/26/2014 9:00:00 PM)

    I like this poem very much. You establish an immediate rapport with the creature with your gentle stroking of its skin.
    And then leaving it and its young in the peace of nature is wonderful. Your poem reminds me of the tone and content of D H.Lawrence's poems about animals and higher praise cannot be given than that association. I agree with you about that cant regarding nature proves god's existence. Nature is a hodge-podge, not an orderly thoughtout pattern. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 17,372 Points Valsa George (5/30/2013 11:51:00 AM)

    Yes, by lifting the lid of Nature, you can see many more wonders! I have heard that in Pensylvania, there are many salamanders though we were taught earlier that they are extinct creatures! I enjoyed your poem, but more the poet's note! I will definitely tell God that there lives a man who denies the entity of God and breaks his commands very often! ! Ha! Ha! (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 605 Points Shahzia Batool (5/30/2013 6:27:00 AM)

    It's new and different! (new for me at least) , here rhyme-scheme is not a bondage as many advocates of free-verse think, but allowing the poet to speak of his heart about the salamander as an object of his keen observation, that's why the poem is a focused one. a good read! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 652 Points Paul Brookes (5/27/2013 1:39:00 AM)

    I hope the salamander lives a long and happy life as happy as this poem. Loved it. BB : O) (Report) Reply

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