Treasure Island

Geetha Jayakumar

(Kerala Palakkad)

Rings of smoke!


He played with circle of smokes.
Loved making as many as circles
With the
Puff of cigarette.
A chain smoker
Made a chain of rings
With the harmful smoke.
He played with the cigarettes
One after another,
Before one get puffed
Another one lighted it.
All warned him
Stay away from it
Now
With an heart attack
He lay on bed like a half dead smoke.
He puffed everyones words
Into the rings of smoke.

Submitted: Thursday, September 19, 2013
Edited: Thursday, September 19, 2013

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  • Kanniappan Kanniappan (9/27/2013 7:17:00 AM)

    Hi Geetha,
    Kindly go through my poem as per the link given below:
    http: //www.poemhunter.com/poem/felt-like-a-hero
    My experience while I was a student during 1961 -69 in Kasturba Medical College, Manipal and Mangalore. I have friends like Dr.C.R.Ramaramy and Dr.Hebbar in Palakkad. (Report) Reply

  • Tiku . (9/22/2013 11:05:00 AM)

    each ring serves as a noose around his neck.nice message. (Report) Reply

  • Kavya . (9/20/2013 5:06:00 AM)

    a good one with an important message to chain smokers who puff smoke in the air for enjoyment, later find themselves on bed with a sense of predicament! (Report) Reply

  • Valsa George (9/19/2013 6:50:00 AM)

    Geetha, when warned this way, definitely it will have greater impact than writing a treatise on the evils of smoking!
    A good job! (Report) Reply

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