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Indira Renganathan (8/18/2008 10:28:00 AM)
Lovely.simple and catchy.Too good a write.Similar subject in my poem Pellmell morning..if time permits kindly read it Thanks for sharing |
Greenwolfe 1962 (7/27/2008 2:09:00 PM)
I liked the rhythm of the second verse and I thought the ending was fine. It
was a good theme and it was clear in meaning. That is why I recommend it.
The rhythm was not consistent, and the rhyme was not the best. But overall,
I felt it was a deserving poem.
GW62 |
Subbaraman N V (7/23/2008 3:21:00 AM)
Reality of life beautifully depicted! |
Dr.subhendu Kar (7/20/2008 10:52:00 AM)
Timeless chase on humanity’s face
To reach the top in vacant space; .....................
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man yet defuddled by the aim spaceless
trudging the path seems to be impetuous
mind when slogged by the maddened world
does he know what he does in rate race.....................what a wonderful poem that resounds even in the furrows of cliff, wellpenned,10+, thanks for sharing |
Yoonoos Peerbocus (7/19/2008 7:51:00 PM)
compressed style......heroic couplet.....worldliness as life goal ironically shows inner emptiness....lifeless life unworthy by any definition........didactic and consciousness arousing..thanks |
Kesav Easwaran (7/19/2008 7:31:00 AM)
a poem on the tiring daily race of life...a racing rising raising poem this... |
Chitra Lele (7/19/2008 3:17:00 AM)
nicely composed
a hard hitting fact of life put across in a mild tone |
Palas Kumar Ray (7/18/2008 11:01:00 PM)
No better creation telling the realities of struggle(!) of life I came across.
your words tell it all in most appropriate but polite words!
*10*10*10* |
Rema Prasanna (7/18/2008 10:15:00 PM)
It is a phase of life you race and race until reach a void at the blank end..well conceived thought.. significant write...10
Rema |
Adele Le Keur (7/18/2008 8:51:00 PM)
you have your finger on what seems to be the pulse of life..i like the enery i felt in your poem.well done! |
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