Quietly Waiting (Sonnet) Poem by Spock the Vegan

Quietly Waiting (Sonnet)



A man sat quietly watching his wife eat.
He looked very hungry as she ate her meat.
Thoughts of yesteryear in his mind coalesced,
In his shirt with holes and his pants not pressed.
Many wrinkles of age were in his face,
Bringing thoughts of trials time could not erase.

The wife was disheveled and her hair was messed.
The two looked like they had not been well blessed.
A waitress stood and watched while empathy bore,
She could not be apathetic any more.
With an aching heart she timidly approached.
'If you're hungry I can get an egg that's poached.'

'That's not necessary', said the man called Heath,
'I'm waiting for her to give me the false teeth.'

Saturday, September 24, 2016
Topic(s) of this poem: apathy,empathy,heartache,old age ,trials
POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
It fits the definition of sonnet in the Meriam-Webster dictionary.
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Kim Barney 25 September 2016

Sadness turned suddenly into comedy! That's great! Taking turns with the false teeth. I like it. This poem is technically a sonnet. It does not follow the rhyme pattern of the Italian sonnet nor the English sonnet, but it does have fourteen lines, and I had a professor of poetry at the university who said that any fourteen-line poem is a sonnet. My sister has won many poetry awards, though, and she disagrees with that, so... I'm no expert. I just write for fun.

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Spock The Vegan 25 September 2016

Thanks, Kim. It was based on a joke that one of my hiking buddies told me.

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