Pretty Lies Poem by Jessica Dehn

This is your first poem posted to this forum, and it's really wonderful! The tale, it seems, has been told in one breath. Only some punctuation marks, and segmenting it into 2/3 stanzas would make the poem look better. 'Say them softly in my ear Blind me with what i want to hear Tell me again your pretty lies ' - Soft and sad, and so touchy!

Your poem is very beautiful and very intense. Beautiful lies seduce us most of the time. And sometimes, We can't separate lies from the truth. Sweet promises are easier to fantasize our utopias than limitating truth.

Thank you Donnie. A score is just a score although I will not lie and say that it isn't dishearting to see a low one but it is ok this was my first one that I posted. I figured that since it was so straight forward that it wasn't as appealing to some. But that was the point it is easy to lie or dress things up with pretty word or complicate verses then it is to lay it out plain and simple.

This is great and I'm shocked to see the low score, I gave you a well deserved 10 because, it's simple and real. No fake wording warped and out of place. Just Jessica laying it out clearly inspired through pain. I honestly love it. I'm surprised our fellow poets noticed this not.

Beautiful :) I Feel the emotions bubbling to the surface and that is not an easy thing to do! Simply beautiful!

Thank you for your comment and tips. I'm glad you enjoyed reading Pretty Lies. I hope you like my next ones as well.