Ph: Haiku: Fun: Lessons Women Taught Me Poem by Brian Johnston

Ph: Haiku: Fun: Lessons Women Taught Me

Rating: 4.0


(A Haiku Trilogy)

Stage 1

you don't share feelings
how can you say you love me
when I don't know you


Stage 2

you ask me nothing
only sharing your feelings
god you're self-absorbed


Stage 3

cosmic truth just rocks
believe me, all is stardust
(but women's feelings)

Brian Johnston
July 30,2014


Poet's Notes:
New: Why Stage 1, Stage 2 and Stage 3? Well (this is funny) , it's kind of like cancer, though of course cancer is not funny either to those going through it.

Also new: I like the inversion of the speakers complaint in the 2nd stanza as well. I love the humor of the 3rd stanza too.

Note that throughout the first two stanzas the speaker is negating the other's feelings. Really it could be a man or a woman speaking) . The real question is, is the other really not sharing/listening or is the speaker afraid to be loved (just making the other wrong) ? The speaker teaches the other to share and then finds the other's sharing annoying. Might the speaker not share with the other what the speaker wants the other to ask the speaker about? Just a thought! : -) God avoiding being a sexist is tough! Whew! Of course at heart I am still truly sexist, and sorry ladies, the third stanza still stands (a stroke of genius) ! Ha!

This poem is like watching the sun go down off the coast of California. You and God are having a nice glass of Merlot, no Piesporter Goldtropschen Spatlese (like sipping the nectar of honey suckle blossems when you were a kid, but with a kick) and you realise that God may be perfect but you aren't. And somehow that's OK, because, at least He loves you! (No woman is present!)

POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
Brian Johnston
July 30,2014
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
* Sunprincess * 31 July 2014

............great job with this collection....I enjoyed each, to difficult to choose a favourite.........

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Valsa George 31 July 2014

(1) As long as a man does not share his feelings openly, a woman will always doubt if he is truly loving her! To love a person one has to know him intimately! (2) If someone keeps thinking of himself and his poems only, naturally the others will see him as self absorbed......! (Ha....Ha!) Just joking! (3) Even though everything is revealed, a woman's feelings ever remain a mystery. This subsequently leads to a break up! Yes, Enjoyed this trilogy of haikus, Brian!

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Daniel Brick 30 July 2014

I like this trilogy, especially the three stages of insecurities. Being a divorced man myself, I can see in my own experience that progression which takes on a kind of wholeness which just might lead to closure. I hope it does for you. It's still a work in progress for me. BTW I couldn't get the gist of the Physics-inflected haiku - I tried to figure out the individual images but I'm missing something. Your notes were interesting!

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