(passionate Picnic)on A Hill Poem by Obinna Kenechukwu Eruchie

(passionate Picnic)on A Hill



(Picnic)atop a lonesome patient hill,
Where serenity does (take place)to heal
The air (passing)to go placid to fill
The atmosphere with warmth (much that)they feel
Is the passion (surely) that remains still
Ever (to be)tougher than reinforced steel.
In each other's eyes (wanting)as they will,
The duo vision love (within that does wheel
(With bliss) finer than flour done by the mill
(Of grains) , ravishing as they take their meal.

Friday, April 17, 2009
Topic(s) of this poem: love and life
POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
This is a lyrical poem about love spent at the picnic
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
AtreyaSarma Uppaluri 08 October 2009

Quite often, a place makes all the difference. By making it atop the hill, the couple have carried their love to its height. The unique blend of height, greenery, waft of rejuvenating breeze, ineffable solitude, vast blue skies, and overview from there, everything that is there … catalyzes the chemistry of their love. An elevating poem with a sweet rhyme.

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Emu Getachew 14 October 2009

nice to see the other side of your pen. However difficult we all have vowed internally to master the language of love or is it passion :)

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Chris G. Vaillancourt 16 October 2009

great poem.......................

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Sivashanmugam Shanmugam 20 October 2009

you have done good..nice poem..the last two lines are in covert..clap clap

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Prince Freakasso 22 October 2009

Well done Obinna, this was truly a sensuous read to ponder.Never be still, keep climbing that hill.The best, PRINCE

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Nivedita Bagchi SPC UK 30 July 2010

Fully cladding with passion and metaphor… ‘Where serenity does (take place) to heal’ ~ Hill Tops makes bosom broaden and full of Bliss that you’ve portrayed very beautifully nice joy ride… thanks sharing… Regards Ms. Nivedita UK 10/10

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Eche Ononukwe 08 March 2010

A romantic love poem, with charming rhyming and powerful imageries, good only for the learned. O' Eruchie, you're a complex poet in the like of Wole Soyinka, the William Shakespeare of Africa!

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Chigemezi Nnadozie Wogu 28 December 2009

Nice good for lovers.10

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sweet piece.. and sweet peace

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Brishti Mazumdar 09 November 2009

...liked your way of tackling words.....

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