Mike Smiff

Out Of Reach - Poem by Mike Smiff

Walked across a pretty flower, thought I'd hold it in my hand
So I knelt down as to grab it, but the flower turned to sand
Tried to carve it as a castle, walls and towers, gates and moat
But the tide washed it away, I had to chase it down by boat
So I dove below the tide, to the bottom of the sea
To restore my pretty castle, try to quell its tragedy
But the castle was no more, and in its place a wooden chest
So I swam back to shore, inside I found a golden nest
Filled with golden little eggs, and so I bought a golden cage
With a golden little perch, just like a golden birdy stage
Though the eggs they never hatched, no they burst into a flame
And although there were no ashes, all the smoke I did contain
In a sky light blue balloon, but I think I'll save my string
Can't try to tie the flower down. Balloon. Flower. Same thing

Topic(s) of this poem: acceptance, change

Comments about Out Of Reach by Mike Smiff

  • Douglas Scotney (5/26/2016 9:19:00 PM)

    Lesson of Tantalus, Mike (Report) Reply

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  • Bill Galvin Bill Galvin (5/26/2016 6:53:00 PM)

    Your material finally recognized... good stuff, Mike... congratulations. (Report) Reply

    Mike Smith Mike Smith (5/26/2016 7:02:00 PM)

    Thanks Bill. I'll have to catch up on your stuff, the nicer weather has carried me outdoors and offline so I haven't been nearly as active

  • Pamela Sinicrope Pamela Sinicrope (5/26/2016 4:33:00 PM)

    Really cool poem! I enjoyed the adventure and good use of rhyme. I played along all they way to the end. What a visual piece. I could see this as a picture book. So well done. Congratulations. (Report) Reply

    Mike Smith Mike Smith (5/26/2016 7:00:00 PM)

    Thanks Pamela. I really appreciate it

  • * Sunprincess * (5/26/2016 4:09:00 PM)

    ......congratulations on member poem...an excellent write ★ (Report) Reply

    Mike Smith Mike Smith (5/26/2016 4:44:00 PM)

    Thank you much

  • Elena Plotkin (5/26/2016 2:49:00 PM)

    Congrats! 10++. Gives Flower power a whole new meaning. (Report) Reply

    Mike Smith Mike Smith (5/26/2016 4:44:00 PM)

    Thank you Elena. I'm a bit baffled at how very many comments I'm getting. A big thanks to everyone for all of them.

  • Kevin Patrick (5/26/2016 2:25:00 PM)

    Fantastic choice for Poem of the Day! , this is a stellar work, of course I didn't mention it before because the imagery blew me away, but I really do love the underlying theme of this, there is nothing you can hold onto for very long that remains. One of your best great choice by the people. (Report) Reply

    Mike Smith Mike Smith (5/26/2016 4:41:00 PM)

    Thanks a lot Kevin... I had a feeling if I ever got picked for poem of the day it would be this one. It is among my favorites. Glad you enjoy it as well

  • Kelly Kurt Kelly Kurt (5/26/2016 1:20:00 PM)

    Well, since I already commented on this piece (at bottom) I will take this opportunity to pass gas in your general direction.: -)
    Love you, buddy. Congrats on being deservedly highlighted! (Report) Reply

    Mike Smith Mike Smith (5/26/2016 4:40:00 PM)

    And I run away in the opposite direction. There's some perks to being faster. Thank you, as always

  • Dershish Kebab (5/26/2016 12:17:00 PM)

    Wonderful to see you get this recognition, my friend. A fantastic, imaginative flight of fancy. (Report) Reply

    Mike Smith Mike Smith (5/26/2016 4:46:00 PM)

    Thanks Kim. This was one of my favorites. Written some years ago, and posted as my first poem on the site

  • Tapan M. Saren Tapan M. Saren (5/26/2016 10:01:00 AM)

    A very very beautiful poem..10 (Report) Reply

    Mike Smith Mike Smith (5/26/2016 4:39:00 PM)

    Thank you Tapan. And as promised, I will be taking a look at some of your new poems later today

  • Sk Nurul Huda Sk Nurul Huda (5/26/2016 9:49:00 AM)

    Fairy tale.? Or a saga? What a run I run with you...and I too fail to fetch the flower....you remind me kubla khan's pleasure dome.....congrats for member poet that your poems deserve.......thank you particularly for answering to almost all comments! (Report) Reply

    Mike Smith Mike Smith (5/26/2016 4:38:00 PM)

    I try to answer them all, sometimes a few slip through the cracks. Thanks you for your comment

  • Briony Nicholls Briony Nicholls (5/26/2016 9:32:00 AM)

    A very well-written, imaginative, deeply-felt and stirring metaphor of the elusiveness of love. Well done Mike and keep refining your talent in poetry-writing. (Report) Reply

    Mike Smith Mike Smith (5/26/2016 4:37:00 PM)

    Not many people catch on to that meaning. The elusiveness of love part that is. But that is indeed what I was thinking when I wrote this. Thank you Briony for reading and for your words

  • Poetic Breath Poetic Breath (5/26/2016 6:03:00 AM)

    Congratulation for being poet of the day Mike, well done (Report) Reply

    Mike Smith Mike Smith (5/26/2016 4:35:00 PM)

    It's an honor. Thanks

  • Ratnakar Mandlik (5/26/2016 4:57:00 AM)

    Heartiest Congratulations on the Poem of the Day. (Report) Reply

    Mike Smith Mike Smith (5/26/2016 4:35:00 PM)

    Thank you very much

  • Edward Kofi Louis Edward Kofi Louis (5/26/2016 3:35:00 AM)

    But the flower turned to sand! Thanks for sharing this poem lovely poem with us. (Report) Reply

    Mike Smith Mike Smith (5/26/2016 4:34:00 PM)

    Thank you for reading

  • Nosheen Irfan Nosheen Irfan (5/26/2016 3:24:00 AM)

    A lovely poem, beautifully conceived and crafted. Enjoyed reading. Congrats! It's deservedly the poem of the day. (Report) Reply

    Mike Smith Mike Smith (5/26/2016 4:33:00 PM)

    I'm glad you enjoyed it Nosheen. Thanks for reading

  • Jayatissa K. Liyanage Jayatissa K. Liyanage (5/26/2016 3:02:00 AM)

    We all live within our own worlds of fantasies. One's fantasy may be nothing for the other. Still, poets know how to interest others on them by knitting with aptly entwined words designed rhythmically. You did it very effectively. Congrats on your accomplishment. Thanks for sharing. X (Report) Reply

    Mike Smith Mike Smith (5/26/2016 4:33:00 PM)

    I thank you much for your compliment Jayatissa. You have a precision about your comments which I always enjoy. Much appreciated

  • Souren Mondal Souren Mondal (5/25/2016 11:55:00 PM)

    Congrats on getting the member poem of the day Mike. It's great to see your talent being, appreciated. As always love your works brother :) (Report) Reply

    Mike Smith Mike Smith (5/26/2016 6:49:00 AM)

    So very nice to hear from you my friend. The world works strangely in that yesterday I was thinking about you and here today you've made contact with me. Always glad to receive your comments Souren. Take care and thank you

  • Kevin Patrick (4/19/2016 7:39:00 PM)

    Easily one of the best acid trips to read, I would kill to write something this imaginative and fun, rhyming is one thing but it takes a keen mind to make this flow and look good. This is fantastic. (Report) Reply

    Mike Smith Mike Smith (4/19/2016 7:53:00 PM)

    Thanks Kevin. I guess I never really realized how trippy this is until you pointed it out. It was written about something that regardless of effort was able to elude attainability. But you bring up a fun and valid point. Thanks for reading

  • Spock The Vegan Spock The Vegan (2/27/2016 8:49:00 AM)

    Excellent use of rhyming. Great job. (Report) Reply

    Mike Smith Mike Smith (4/4/2016 8:30:00 PM)

    Thanks Spock this was one of my favorite rhyming pieces

  • Juan Olivarez (2/26/2016 1:05:00 PM)

    Beautifully written, wonderful rhyming scheme. (Report) Reply

    Mike Smith Mike Smith (2/26/2016 1:19:00 PM)

    Thank you Juan

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Poem Submitted: Monday, February 8, 2016

Poem Edited: Monday, February 8, 2016

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