Our Choice Poem by Aufie Zophy
Our Choice
Walking on a hot and scorching day
We meet a splitting of the way
A way downwards looking shady, some trees are there
A way upwards, sandy without trees, just looking bare
Somewhere deep inside we know
The downwards shady path goes low
And down that place, there is no tree
Just heat and sweat and more ennui
Somewhere deep inside we are aware
That the way up, though initially a little bare
Will bring us to a place with lots of shade and big relief
It is God’s way, so I believe
Shall we choose the way below with instant pleasure?
Leading down to a place of heat, we cannot measure
Or shall we make little effort on the upper way?
And enjoy shade and breeze day by day
Congratulations! This is fantastic poem with wisdom not only for kids but the grown-ups also. Each word is measured and soar with wings of rhythm into a reader's mind.I rate it 10+.Great work, keep it up..Thanks for the invitation.
Day by day, we have the will of chioce. Its what we choose that determines our path. An excellent write. A little thought provoking as well.Well done!
Fantastic poem enjoyed reading it and well written.... Keep writing need to read more of your poems....10+++
Many a times we find ourselves blaming our destiny, people and sometimes even the lord for the misfortunes that come to us in life But often we forget the choice we made to bring that misfortune to ourselves, the lord is always with us, we also do hear his voice when we are making a choice and the voice comes from inside us. Fantastic piece of work 10+
Read this fabulous poem with interest and appreciated the ending: shall we make little effort on the upper way? And enjoy shade and breeze day by day. Top score!
a wonderful poem of how choosing different paths in life can change not just our lives but can also be to the benefit of others? ....................beautifully written Aufie
Your talent is truly a gift to all who have the pleasure of reading your work. You are definitely one of my favorite poets. I just drift dreamily away to the final thrilling destination each of your poems takes the reader to. You have God given talent my friend!
All of your poems are created from deep thought and each offers the reader a lesson of life. You have a wise manner of writing and your mature wisdom always shines through.
awesome poem.... it is more than just a verse. it is a message. true words. really we should choose our way by ourself and we must know what way is right or wrong.... Midway upon the journey of our life I found myself within a forest dark, For the straightforward pathway had been lost. (Dante Alighieri)
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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Great allegory.... Well done.. Thanks for your kind comment to Your Turn