Captain Cur

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Odes, Kubla Khan

Naked Venus of desire
the Evening Star of man’s unrest
adorned in dreams of wanton fire
was charmed by Kubla Khan’s request
and sent this message East and West.
“Renowned craftsmen from afar
nursed on visions Khan has seen
instilled with constructs of the stars
shall build his pleasure dome’s decree.”

Buried stones of enormous girth
compressed and gardened by the earth
upon these stones his Kingly prize
Khan’s tall white structure will arise
with chiseled columns that shall breach
through balustrades that rise beneath,
amid the raging skies of blue
the center of the dome of pleasure
will twin the sun at the height of noon
and in the evening's gemstone treasure
adorn the anklet of the moon.

Below in caverns hollowed by the waves
strange creatures in the darkness thrive;
they swim the sea with lidless eyes,
with instincts soul map myriad caves
with black nocturnal sight;
creatures glow through endless night
and in their spine each tiny spark
colors dance from drop to drop,
florescent creatures lone delight
rejoicing in each faint speck of light.

But oh! the passageway that leads
suspended between the mountain and the gate
upon these terrible heights the clouds give siege
bright lightning strikes and thunder quakes,
and through this rite on charging steeds
Khan bequeaths his reign of dreams.

The archway at the precipice
vaults deep into the rock
and the force of the intermittent fountains
lifts their two bride stones to unlock
the entrance grate to the covered mountain
that is fed by the falling ice
where trickling streams fall fast and ever
melting in persuasive light
each drop sounding its harp-like measure
as the creatures sing in the sea of night.

The dome of the Mount of Pleasure
appears floating on the rays
supported by frozen fountains
of an ocean's sunless waves.

Venus awoke to this new sight
a floating pleasure dome
on waves of ice!

Submitted: Friday, June 14, 2013
Edited: Tuesday, June 18, 2013

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Poet's Notes about The Poem

The pirates and I wrote this ode
to the fabulous Khan.
Venus has so ordained.

Comments about this poem (Odes, Kubla Khan by Captain Cur )

  • Gold Star - 10,568 Points * Sunprincess * (11/1/2013 11:17:00 PM)

    Captain, you and the pirates have outdone yourselves again.. keep up the good work :) (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 339 Points Danny Draper (10/24/2013 3:08:00 AM)

    There be vast project and construction in this endeavour to honour the mighty Khan and his Venus in excelsior. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Sun Shine (8/1/2013)

    Oh My God! ! ! ! ! ! beyond me. (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 2,099 Points Anthony Di''anno (6/21/2013 12:44:00 PM)

    Adorable. Hats off to you and your pirates Sir. Very well written :) (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 17,372 Points Valsa George (6/20/2013 12:47:00 AM)

    Even Coleridge himself will envy at this new pleasure dome decreed by Kubla Khan! ! What an artistic marvel you have erected in thin air with your wonderful words, Captain! This deserves well over 10 (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 939 Points Saadat Tahir (6/18/2013 7:56:00 AM)

    a string of pearls from the pirates lost treasure chest, now lies strewn on the beech for all to savour

    :)) (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 2,675 Points Wahab Abdul (6/17/2013 10:02:00 PM)

    this one is really great, i astounded when i read this poem.. (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,120 Points Diane Hine (6/17/2013 9:12:00 PM)

    I agree with Shahzia and with Venus supervising construction, the palace will surely be the equal of this fantabulous poem! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 267 Points David Wood (6/17/2013 5:09:00 AM)

    A wonderful use of the English language. A brilliant poem and a worthy 10. (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 605 Points Shahzia Batool (6/16/2013 3:13:00 PM)

    This is he reconstruction of the fabulous pleasure-dome after many centuries, certainly imagination knows no bounds or borders, Divine miracle, this power of conception is, indeed! While reading your poetry Coleridge often comes to my mind, not in this reference but regarding his difference of fancy, the primary and the secondary imagination, the active and the passive imagination what he has discussed in his criticism work...By reading your architectonics, i must say the great khan can cancel his own orders if he gets to know about it now; as a regular reader of your poems i can say you too have drunk the milk of paradise. this poem will go in my favorite poems' list. (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,075 Points Unwritten Soul (6/15/2013 6:35:00 AM)

    Speechless, amazing write, if i were one of the pirates, i shall proud that we did this...i love the words selection as much it flows as if your Benevolent ship moving free toward me_Soul (Report) Reply

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