Niagara Falls, Subdued Poem by Nika McGuin

Niagara Falls, Subdued



What is the trick
to being happily single for years?
to subdue emotion so deep, for so long,
that even you don't realize you're doing it

Until one day
the dam bursts open,
the bridge collapses,
and the river overflows

How?
you began counting the years
which, sure enough, only brings tears
the ones you had no clue
you'd even been holding back
all this time

So the trick?
empty the riverbed
and let the floodgates stand agape
wash away all concealed pain
then, shut the door
solidify the rugged bridge
start again, wait again
hide the waters behind
your widest grin

Wednesday, January 21, 2015
Topic(s) of this poem: loneliness
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Daniel Brick 22 January 2015

Nika, Nika, I want to say something but I don't know how to phrase it. Let me think this through, but expect something from me in the near future. Something respectful, low-keyed but sincere, I promise. // This is a vividly written poem. There isn't a moment when your writer's hand falters: it expresses its theme with economy, speed, and purpose. This is the craft that results, I believe, when you have been writing poetry for a long time of consistent effort. There are no general passages, or passages with weak vocabulary.The section where you metaphorically prepare to open the flood gates AND THEN rebuild them - both of those passages are especially strong and fluid. It seems to me your poetry writing has reached this point: When you have a topic or character in mind, the words come clustering forward, they're ready for you when you need them. That was true for both NOMADA and FLORETTE. The language seems inevitable.

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