Nexus In Open Poem by Mehta Hasmukh Amathaal

Nexus In Open



Our system allow
The illiteracy to grow
He can be head of space technology
Whereas he can't find place in zoo (logy)

People offer money
With their mastery
Claim close acquaintance
And avail full chance

Leaders get full access
In foreign banks
Wealth, wealth and wealth
It is inviting country's death

Great amount of national wealth
Remain outside effecting economic health
Poor remain poor and rich grow
The money, without check, speedily flow

Nobody wants nexus to come in open
Then it may make their exist and run
People shall be after their blood
Now the message been clearly understood

Thursday, October 30, 2014
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Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal 01 November 2014

Puzzling. the avoidance of grammatical endings and articles makes it sound choppy and forced. Random rhyme, random prosody. Very chaotic and unpleasant sound to this. The message is also troubling, a little cryptic, almost like the whole thing is a partially decrypted transmission. It is well done to serve the apparent purpose, well crafted, but i can't say it's enjoyable or made me think of something in a new way. This one may have gone over my head, I'm afraid.

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Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal 30 October 2014

ok Desmond Washington8 minutes ago Ok

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Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal 30 October 2014

Our system allow The illiteracy to grow

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Vadali, Dist: - sabarkantha, Gujarat, India
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