My Prowling Ph Eyes.... [dementia; Very Short; My 'Correcting' Of Poems On Ph] Poem by Bri Edwards

My Prowling Ph Eyes.... [dementia; Very Short; My 'Correcting' Of Poems On Ph]



Overuse of my prowling blue hawk eyes........may
bring early onset dementia and dear Bri's demise.

On the other hand, my wife thinks on PH I will find
a prescription to help me slow the slip of my mind.

Monday, September 1, 2014
Topic(s) of this poem: old age
POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
my dear PH friend, Valsa George, sent me a message in which she referred to my 'hawk eyes' because i tend to point out others misspellings etc. in the same message she mentioned 'dementia'; i'm not sure if she was talking about me or her! ! !
anyway, the poem followed and the part about my wife is true, even though she doesn't approve of me mentioning her online! :) bri

p.s. don't tell her i mentioned her (my wife that is) .
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Khairul Ahsan 28 September 2014

Your 'hawk eyes' help the poets to make their poems mistake-free and prune their superfluous offerings. I have always welcomed it. Just today I wrote a poem on The Language Of Dementia. Hope you can make some time to read it with your 'hawk eyes' and offer a few words.

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Noreen Carden 25 September 2014

Oh your correcting of spellings [mustakes] mistakes has been a pain in my nether regions many a time. So happy hunting hawk eyes. Well done on the poem.

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Valsa George 04 September 2014

I feel honoured! My comment has led you into writing a poem.....! Your scrutinizing eyes, eager to find out others' misspellings will delay the chances of an early onset of dementia...... so keep your hawk eyes wide open!

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Beach Girl 02 September 2014

Your wife's probably right! :)

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