My Hate Poem by danyelle tedrow

My Hate

Rating: 5.0


my head is full of hate and my heart is full of ice and my soul is nothen but dust my life less eyes are like staring at the dead trees in the winter i cover my arms and legs 2 hide what my life less soul has cause me to do my love my hate my suffering

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
John Knight 14 December 2009

Hi Dany - this is a Black Poem - it would benefit form a little restructuring to make it more like a poem. MY HATE. My head is full of hate My heart is full of ice My soul is nothing but dust My lifeless eyes are like staring..... At the dead trees in the winter I cover my arms and legs To hide what my lifeless soul Has caused me to do. My love - My hate - My suffering. Now that I have revamped it I will attenmpt to analyse it. This is a very black poem Dany - I thought that when you got to Roswell NM USA you would have been a lot happier. When we are in a black mood it does affect our whole life our Head - Heart & Soul. Hate - Ice - Dust - Dead Trees. Our souls cannot die Angel because if they do we would die - You have everything to live for -The Spirit of Christmas promises love - joy - peace and happiness - We all love you at PH and hate to see you 'Down in the Dumps'. Can you cheer us all up by posting a 'Happy Poem'. Love you in Poetry - JOHN. .

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Abdallah Gamal 13 September 2011

Although it talks about HATE, but u made a success in painting a picture that talking about different emotions and metaphors, really beautiful one :)

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Ankita Sharma 15 March 2010

It's short and stuck I like it

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Martin Riddick 22 February 2010

that was dope i can relate been there before

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Justina Haner 01 February 2010

wonderful poem i can totally relate to it

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Guess who's back Angel Wade 26 January 2010

THIS IS VER NICE AND I AGREE WITH JOHN KNIGHT

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