My First Love Poem by sOoraj Pottekat

My First Love



That the day i found my first love
she was pretty she was cute
i never realised thats my love
the day i lost her i realised the truth
i am in love with my dear julee
in my life cried only once
thats the day i lost her
thats the blackest day of my life

i remember those days we where together
she was the who wake me in the morning
she comes in the morning waging her tail
theres a cute little smile on her face
she jumped to my bed to wake me up
she kissed on my face to wake me up
oo my first love i know you can here this
you are my first love and still my love

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Nibedita Deb 08 May 2007

Hey, I think this could been much better... A little more expressions, a little more bit of emotion and of course a little less of clarity! ! ! Please consider revising....

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