hasmukh amathalal

Gold Star - 98,237 Points (17/05/1947 / Vadali, Dist: - sabarkantha, Gujarat, India)

Miss ', I Really Miss(246) /500 # - Poem by hasmukh amathalal

I was stepping in to become young
I thought it is nice journey but too long
I am afraid and take care not to go wrong
I was expecting everything for song

I am so much influenced by lady smile
She has entered in life just before while'
Life seems to be so interesting and fine
I want to dance on floor with glass of wine

Miss, you can't be so rude
For a word you have made prelude,
All warmth and affection you have included
Hate and distance you have excluded

I never expected you to cast
All doubts but trust should not last
You were the first to realize it fast
Reality known but never wore any kind of mast,

Your innocence and name is kind to infuse
Kind words for me but not meant to confuse
Time was for decision but you never refused
Always stood at right point and crisis defused

Even amidst delicate moments
You did not offer a word or comments
You were hurt most but you used simple word,
Is it blessings to you or gift from Lord?

I loved you most as your dearest friend
Still you didn't put any word at the end,
Kept me at dark or asked or any excuse
Used otherwise it as pretext, denied or refused

'Miss' I miss you but you don't miss,
Did not expect from you kind hug or simple kiss
Not even kind gesture or more of any show
Still I miss you and never beat eye brow

Will this uncertainty remain or go?
Life will be full of remorse but still I would forgo
Is there any restriction from your side or embargo?
You bear always 'no entry' smile with logo

You called on me for good luck and best wishes
I remained dead as no water was available for fish,
May be it is very hard to swallow for some reasons
Why then there should be draught without any season?

I was quick to grasp situation,
Avoided unwarranted efforts for persuasion,
Shock was sudden and heavy but came very late,
I did accept it with grace and as part of fate

She didn't become mine for some reasons
I waited simply for spring season
She too eagerly longed for strong bond
As I was inclined and very fond

She had everything to loose
But she had no option to choose
Why did she take extreme step?
She always used to call me as sweet babe

It may be her way of thinking
It left me high and dry with blinking
What should I call her sacrifice?
A step of dedication or break of promises?

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Comments about Miss ', I Really Miss(246) /500 # by hasmukh amathalal

  • Veteran Poet - 1,173 Points Titto Mutunguti (11/3/2015 10:59:00 AM)

    You bear always 'no entry' smile with logo...haha this is so deep...definately from your heart..i love it (Report) Reply

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  • Bronze Star - 2,180 Points Vaidyanathan Ram (10/11/2015 3:32:00 AM)

    Nice rhyming words sir (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 11,391 Points Seema Jayaraman (9/16/2015 6:39:00 AM)

    very lyrical..lovely (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 4,258 Points Tanya Stewart-boateng (8/31/2015 3:00:00 PM)

    Fantastic write. Thank you. (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,180 Points Melissa Patty (8/15/2015 6:44:00 AM)

    Beautiful poem! Thankyou for sharing. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 11,241 Points Allotey Abossey (6/24/2015 4:52:00 AM)

    You have created this poem well.... Good work (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 469 Points Gauri Sharma (6/13/2015 5:59:00 AM)

    She had everything to loose
    But she had no option to choose...superb (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 473 Points Jacob Macharia (5/29/2015 5:47:00 AM)

    Should I call it a break of promises...well articulated... I hope she read it (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,385 Points Rakhi Jayashankar (4/12/2015 11:07:00 PM)

    broken heart cannot be mended
    however perfect but the marks remain (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 2,438 Points Louis Borgo (3/5/2015 6:56:00 PM)

    Great Poem this could be a follow up of to poem I have call The Tower Of Mist. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 6,316 Points Jaishree Nair (2/14/2015 9:51:00 PM)

    You have penned the theme very articulately. Rhyming scheme excellent. Would value your comments on my poems too (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 655 Points Sahra Hussein (11/9/2014 10:57:00 AM)

    beautiful words and heart teaching! ! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 6,718 Points Howard 'the motivational poet' Simon (7/20/2014 12:05:00 PM)

    A captivating and creative creation. Well done my friend! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 45,332 Points Gangadharan Nair Pulingat (7/5/2014 11:08:00 PM)

    A beautiful poem and its theme and contents in its beauty told by the poet. (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,394 Points Tajudeen Shah (4/24/2014 9:59:00 PM)

    whatever you call her behaviour, nature, she has truly been immortalized by your mighty, passionate pen. God Bless. wow factor on the go... (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 877 Points Jitesh Shah (3/25/2014 8:59:00 AM)

    very very nice poem and also read my poem sir (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 421 Points Shania K. Younce (3/16/2014 7:32:00 PM)

    A very well writ poem indeed. Bien! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 122 Points Yash Shinde (3/16/2014 12:35:00 PM)

    great rhyme scheme....rapid transition of moods and rhythm..............great narrative story of a break up..........seriously......loved it.. (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 4,262 Points Soumita Sarkar (11/1/2013 12:47:00 AM)

    What a lovely break up narrated in a story......I invite you to read my poems and comment.Thanks. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Gibz Rising (10/4/2013 10:21:00 PM)

    all is forgiven, and love is by your side once again, , free of mind speaks only your spirit as trails have nominated words of fire, , re-birth for you will be distant, and shall not forget the memory of our past, ,
    dedication to the sword of love is empty with out a rock to bare its grace, , solace and divinity, combine for infinite synergy , , without a peacocks kind words there would be no reason to fly, all is forgiven to those who stand bye my side.. i love you and you love me to the end of time... NOW RISE! ! (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Friday, April 17, 2009

Poem Edited: Tuesday, July 29, 2014

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