Me And You Poem by Miranda Van Yperen

Me And You

Rating: 5.0


When you laugh,
I do too.

When you smile,
I think of you.

When I blink,
I see your face.

I need help,
I’m lost in space

You dropped me down,
Onto the pile.

With other girls,
All in denial.

You left me there,
I wish you knew.

Just how much,
I think of you

It took this long,
For you to know.

And now you know,
But you still said ‘no’

So I’m here,
Wondering why….

Why did I ever like this guy?

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
PERSIAN NIGHTINGALE 23 July 2009

well done, keep writing 10

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Lady Grace 22 July 2009

well, this is really good i think your mom or dad is a true poet becoz poetic wrds run in the blood and i know you can be a future smart man congratulation in your poetry dear little sweetheart..

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Chitra - 22 July 2009

an emotionally self relective write...well done

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Justin Unanue 22 July 2009

From a critical stanpoint, nice progression and flow. It went from lovestruck to reluctant, to heartbroken very nicely. From a personal stand point I liked it, I connected with it, it was good.

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Jessica Murray 14 July 2009

Oh My God...thats amazing well done xxxPEACExxx

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