Manifestation Of A Buddha Poem by Cheryl Lynn Moyer Peele
Manifestation Of A Buddha
A child missing for a year in remote Nepal,
re-emerges now 'The Enlightened one, '
the reincarnated Buddha, cross-legged
beneath a tree. No sign of ten months
of hunger or thirst for anything but silent prayer.
Bamjon, last seen by tens of thousands
in 2005 now has shoulder length hair
with his body wrapped in a simple white cloth.
People are walking to see him, to be touched
by a God, some believe. These terrible times
have called him forth. Molding him into
Buddha himself, who said, “All that we are
is the result of what we have thought.
The mind is everything. What we think
we become.”
And so he has.
great poem cheryl, the structure of the stanzas is enlighting and the choice of words you use helps decribe more about thre poem itself.
Cheryl, i think that was a very well thought out and inspired poem. it really showed how you view buddah and that makes it even more poiniant.
well cheryl, the poem has great potential, i will hasten to say. the depth of the message balaced by the simplicity of its delivery is one strong point of your work. However, i must say that as far as form is concerned, your work is slightly lacking in rythm. the language is a bit plain or prosaic. Also i have a bit of a problem with the line construction. the excessive enjambment made it seem as if you were finding it difficult knowing where to break your lines. Your message is great but i would suggest a reworking of the poem to infuse rythm and not to give everything away... make your readers look forward to the next line, not sure of what to expect. that way you keep them reading. the secret is: show, dont tell. work on those lines. i also couldntr help noticing some problematic tenses (or is it just me?) : ...by a God, some believe. These terrible times has called him forth. Molding him into... i thought it would be 'these terrible times [have]' I LOVED YOUR LAST THREE LINES, HOWEVER. A BEAUTIFUL CLIMAX!
The form and the richness of the manifestation blend beautifully! It grips the reader. Compact and deep! Gerry
For me this poem has very little to do with religious orientation. It tells an interesting story, which is supported by the excellent use of blank verse as a technical aesthetic. Basically I think it's less important to focus on any religious content but rather to feel what has been written here. And I mean FEEL. Because, for my 10c worth, I think this piece can be as ariligious as it might be riligious. The question is; which iterpretaion makes ht epiece more intriguing?
beautiful use of imagery that encapsulates the meaning of the poem... even though i am not religious it managed to capture my attention... keep it up :)
Sorry but I have logged on after a long long time... Hi...you have nicely written... When God holds someone's hand in Hid Hand then nothing remains valuable for someone.... prayers...keep it up...
Hi Cheryl...Nicely manifested. We all have a Buddha inside. The sole purpose of our existence is to realize and bring out the Buddha in us from within. Not everyone may be able to achieve that but manifest to some extent or the other to make the world a better place to live in! !
oh God what a great poem and inspiring one. it really touched my heart. keep it ip the good work.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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A short, concise and narrative poem but pregnant with meaning and message.Nice one cheryl, wish to read more works from you.