Living Dead Girl Poem by Tyler Tillett

Living Dead Girl

Rating: 4.5


I called her. She didn't answer.
Something is wrong. I know it, I can feel it.
Her light is on; it is bright, very bright. I opened the door.
I feel a cold draft coming at me.
It feels like 10 degrees. I see her zoning out. She has a smile on her face. I wonder why. The window is wide open, there is snow on the ground. I saw terror in her eyes. I start to smell blood. Maybe I could have smelt blood when I came in to her room but was to distracted on looking for her.
I see the cats liking her wrist. I wonder why. I see blood on the floor, in a puddle next to her.
Am I too late? Will she survive? Why did she do this? I can’t think.
I was disturbed by the way she laugh and laugh at the pain. Evan though she is laughing, you could see the terror in her eyes.

Tyler Tillett
1/28/2009

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
dripping heart 30 January 2008

kinda reminds me of somethin i would write...good job man

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Chilee Tipton 30 January 2008

great job. looks like something i would write at times.

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Jeong Jung 30 January 2008

Interesting poem. Very Nice.

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Arfa Karim 03 February 2008

Very nicely put and very creative. I wish you best of luck to continue writing poems like that. Good job.

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Sparklle Rainne 08 March 2008

I adore this one. It reminds me quite a lot of the girl I like. So much that it near made me cry, in fact. It is very good.

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Rae Rae 07 March 2008

geat visuals, very vivid images

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Sarah Macbean 03 February 2008

its really good, the tension of wanting to know what happens and how it ends, keeps your eyes moving down the screen. well done

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Peter A. Crowther 03 February 2008

I like the way you gradually increase the sense of drama and terror

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Dislocated Heart 03 February 2008

very nice piece of work you wrote. great job! -Justin

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