Linguistic Lusciousness Poem by Paul Butters

Thanks for the comprehensive critique there Tim. I agree this one is rather rich at first, like honey can be TOO sweet. If it looks like I went with the flow, well that's because that's what I did. Indeed that's what I DO. No apologies. It's a creative process.....

Liked the used of alliteration, but felt that either it drowned the sense, or the sense drowned it. The 'flushing the forest floors' was a really nice image maybe worth pursuing further and fingers playfully dancing was a great end. Alterntatively, you could have stuck with the languorous, luxuriant 'l's and played with those in shorter poem? lips, lap, lead pencil. Euqlly those p alliterations suggest something quite different and more tippytappy...Nice poem indeed. Thanks for sharing!