Limerick.16. Sour Grapes Poem by Valsa George

Limerick.16. Sour Grapes



An old man met a sweet girl of seventeen
Whom he hoped could marry in her teen
He asked-'Can we dance'
She curtly said 'No chance'
He quipped- 'If you wish, I amn't keen'

Wednesday, August 13, 2014
Topic(s) of this poem: dance
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Pradip Chattopadhyay 13 August 2014

nice to see the old man holding onto his dignity.

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Dinesan Madathil 13 August 2014

Maybe, he can make one more attempt and she may agree to dance! Miracles are there madam, so the grapes need not remain sour ever! Perhaps, you needed this pace of writing..

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Akhtar Jawad 13 August 2014

An interesting write, but in a western society a father may dance with her daughter.

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Hardik Vaidya 13 August 2014

Valsa I loved your poem. Though the grapes are not all sour, a few sweet ones are always present in a clutch of plenty.

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Geetha Jayakumar 13 August 2014

Beautiful poem Valsa. What a beautiful and humble way of telling... He quipped- If only you wish, I am not keen This is really fantastic. Dinesh Sir comment quiet interesting....Smiles...

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Kumarmani Mahakul 17 September 2019

He asked-'Can we dance' She curtly said 'No chance'......He quipped- 'If you wish, I amn't keen'.....amusing expression. Brilliant Limirick. Enjoyed.

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Kanav Justa 24 August 2014

Haha... the old man has a last laugh... i wonder how the teen girl feels

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Bri Edwards 22 August 2014

you garnered (a word i 'never' use) some fine comments, especially the ones i considered clever. i especially liked the one from Tirupathi Chandrupatla (8/14/2014) . i believe this IS a limerick. not bad. of course i could do better! :) :) thanks for sharing. you are one of my favorites, Valsa. but you already know that. :) bri - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - p.s. i might add: He persisted: My sweet, shall we then go to bed? , to which she replied, NO! old man. Go drop DEAD! But he stopped NOT his attempts to woo the cute girl, saying Come now, my young lady, give me a whirl.

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Savita Tyagi 18 August 2014

Hahaha! enjoyed the poem. Very witty.

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Aftab Alam Khursheed 17 August 2014

avoidance with negation and the heading sour grapes by fox a fox call - If only you wish, I am not keen thanks

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