Lights Out Poem by Aden Orie

Lights Out

Rating: 4.3


my long term feelings
dont last long
1 important thought enters
and another one goes
i can never hold on
to any of those
so im stuck without thinking
repetitve actions
cause my feelings dont last long
i wish they were stronger
i wish i was stronger
strong enough to see through the night
and be able to see, just 2 steps ahead
im stuck
tied to a branch
goin no where
cause these thauhts
dont last to long
i wish i was strong
my heart is so weak
my sight is blind
and i make 1 good choice
and 20 bad
i try to do right
but wheres that heart that i had?
when i was stronger
when i wasnt so weak
when life was always great
at deepest points
points of nothing
i was always so hopeful
yet now im not hopeless
i just need something
i need you
to lead me
through the night

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Christine Still 25 February 2014

I don't wish to sound critical, but is there an editor at this site who at least looks at what is published here and sent out to other members? What if a writer asks for help? Just wondering. It does say Poems and not 'critique, doesn't it? Thanks

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Melody Geller 04 July 2008

aw what a good poem.I love how the reader can really tell through your poems how much you need and love this person.Theyre great.

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