Light Poem by Susan Lacovara

Light

Rating: 5.0


My eyes light up

inside the thought of you

Your smile like fireflies

I've caught a one

or two

While the summer strokes

my shoulders

And the breeze blows back

my mane

Dare I dream, dare I dream

you'll come again

Tuesday, June 24, 2014
Topic(s) of this poem: romance
POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
(06/24/14) The start of a song...I now find myself composing...one verse at a time. (For tb and his working knowledge of how patience prevails)
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Stephen Katona 24 July 2014

I read it once as a poem, and again as a song after reading your notes. I enjoyed both greatly. The words flow well.

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Daniel Brick 22 July 2014

From the moment I started reading the first LIGHT poem I knew I was hearing a song! So I wasn't surprised to find that confirmed in your POET'S NOTES. The simplicity of the language, repetition of key lines, (dare I dream) , and focus on just one intense emotion are all elements which make up song lyrics. We don't want reflections slowing things down! We want a primal experience and your poem delivers that intensity. I'd like to hear this set to the music you would create out of it.

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