Last Laugh Poem by Mehta Hasmukh Amathaal

Last Laugh

Rating: 2.8


Doctor was on visit to mental asylum ward
Mentally retarded patients were enjoying with words
Some one was singing and some were crying
Each one had his own drum for beating

Doctor could notice one patient with happiness
There was complete shine on his face
“Why is it so unusual” he asked nurse
“Sir, he is claiming to be poet” and behaving also of course

Doctor was amused at the incidence
But he was afraid of patient’s presence
He was happy alright but stared dangerously
“Just keep watch” he should not be isolated completely

Doctor checked complete history
There was no problem for recovery
He was not to be treated for madness
It was simple case of aloofness

“Such patients should be kept in isolation ward”
They can breathe freely there without work
Give them impression of being real masters
They will enjoy at the feeling of being youngsters

“But sir, any medicines are you suggesting”? Nurse asked
“No, no medicine needed but only resting” doctor stated
He is suffering from unique disease called “only me”
So let him stay here as much as he wanted and feel free

We wondered at the treatment given
All the ills of patient was forgotten
Doctor was master of his profession
We had last laugh on matter with confession

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal 14 August 2013

Doctor was on visit to mental asylum ward Mentally retarded patients were enjoying with words Some one was singing and some were crying Each one had his own drum for beating

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Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal 14 August 2013

Sandra Amanda Hamlin Only me? Perhaps less conflicts would occur if those labelers of aloofers practiced what they preached-And how about that notion of accountability? -The reality seems far worse-rather scary are those who play doctor on t.v. and never do get into any self evaluations-No mirrors huh? Meanwhile some only me's actually seek help or works with health care specialists -Reality is so heavy - What lies ahead in both knowledge and self empowerment-When a doc's a quack shoot him or her 25 minutes ago · Unlike · 1

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Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal 14 August 2013

story Brain Boy51 minutes ago the build up was interesting Comment +1 Interesting subject.

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Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal 14 August 2013

Ron Kyker44 minutes ago First, reviewing is not something I like to do. Please take my critique and use it as you see fit. It is your work and I respect all works as the child you have born. Parts of this are very good, but the lack of any rhyming scheme makes it a difficult read. With a little tweaking, this could be a very good piece. The subject is very interesting to me. You obviously have skill in your writing. Just choose a pattern and stick with it. It will add to the readability of it. You could go freeverse. I like the way you write, just find a pattern you like and it will help the flow and make for a very good read. Keep writing. This is a subject I've never seen in a poem. Good choice. Comment +1 GOOD POEM

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Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal 14 August 2013

bryan perkins50 minutes ago THANK YOU FOR SHARING

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Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal 14 August 2013

Pranmi Parvesh Khandelwal and Theo Karas like this. Hasmukh Mehta welcome a few seconds ago · Unlike · 1

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Vadali, Dist: - sabarkantha, Gujarat, India
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