Known. Poem by Laranco Patricia
Known.
Who can beleive himself as known?
There is so much inattention
We are crossing this universe
Being as opaque as a night
Only just we are brushing it
And it’s only just brushing us
The memory of us is and
Will only be distorsion,
Necessary stuttering,
Superficial misinterpretation.
Our words, the presence of our bodies
And gestures
Only will be remembered
As sketched fragmented tracks,
As fragments of interpretation.
Who can believe himself as known
There is so much carelessness
Towards others,
So few empathy,
So much hastly misunderstandings.
Each body is a skinbag
And each being,
A galaxy
Separated from its sisters
By abysses of light-years.
We lived as unknown
And we shall die as unknown,
There’s no proximity;
No, actually, there is nothing except coldness,
Cosmic indifference which is sowing
Separation
And language which is a felon
An untrue link that deludes
Us.
Patricia Laranco
I think this could happen in the busy metros, where people are always in a rush to reach their destinations, hence don't have time for other issues. In many cases it requires real effort and hard, to meet both ends, so we are happy living within ourselves. Nice observation. Life is getting to be monotonous, and we are slowly turning into machines.....................
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I would like to translate this poem
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4/25/2024 10:20:52 AM # 1.0.0.1119
Dear Patricia, Thanks for your invite to comment on your poems. Well, the topic chosen by you is nice but the presentation has to be sharpened. The submission should never be directed as a speech.What you want to convey should be presented in a capsule of metaphor or imagery where the reader easily can relate to. Less said is always better.I feel you should change two words 'inattention'and repetition of 'only just brushing' and 'hastily' should be replaced by 'hasty'.You can refer to any Thesaurus for replacement. Don't take it as discouraging.I feel, you have possibility and this is to help only. Liked the topic rated at 8 Rajkumar