Gabriel Forrester

Rookie (July 29,1989)

Knocking At The Doors - Poem by Gabriel Forrester

You are the same through space and through time
The most beautiful of things I believe to be thine,
But how is it you are so far away from me?
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Comments about Knocking At The Doors by Gabriel Forrester

  • Rookie Gabriel Forrester (11/4/2013 8:30:00 AM)

    Thank you for the comments everyone. It's interesting to receive feedback from people I've never met before. It somehow seems more... truthful. To set the record straight. I am still knocking, haven't been let in yet. However, that's fine. Im cool with it. I very much appreciate the positive comments. Its all a writer wants to hear really. That people got what he was trying to say. (Report) Reply

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  • Rookie Zak Pearce (11/4/2013 7:03:00 AM)

    Verrrry good :) For an amateur poet, you pay great attention to structure. In terms of constructive criticism: paying attention to meter and rhyme is often a good way to improve on an otherwise brilliant poem. Keep up the good work! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Kat Hylkema (10/21/2013 7:22:00 PM)

    You're the same through space and time.
    It's good, Gabe! Although knocking can get mundane, don't stop believing. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 19,819 Points Ramesh Rai (10/13/2013 3:56:00 AM)

    So I will keep knocking till the end of time,
    Till my own heart within yours resides,
    Till I'm so close that I feel you within,
    Till the two that are twain, become one person.
    a touching write (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 12,208 Points Khairul Ahsan (9/8/2013 1:38:00 AM)

    'Forever on the outside while inside I still yearn.'....This line really touched me. Over all, this is a lovely poem on love. If the situation described is autobiographical, I only hope that it catches the attention of your target audience and motivate her to keep her doors ajar. (Report) Reply

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