Kigo Entries (Versions) Poem by Lorraine Margueritte Gasrel Black
Kigo Entries (Versions)
White bunny
shadow on snow scares
running rabbit
Version One*
The yellow
lotus rises
the stars crown
Version Two:
the yellow
lotus rises
starry night crowns
Version one*
green reeds
turn brown
Summer Sun smiles
Version Two:
nodding green reeds
turn brown
Summer's Sun smiles
Version one*
rainbows color
red to violet
dance from clouds
Version two
Rainbows colour
red follows violet
dance from clouds
Stealing night
dreams claim souls floating
like angels
timid ivy
chatters to stone deaf
granite walls
elderberry flowers
bees buzz
my wine
Version 1*
Twirling umbrella
pandas dance
splashing rain
Version 2;
My umbrella twirls
black and white pandas dance
splashing raindroplets
Thinking caps in flight
jubilant graduates cheer
high expectations
the old wooden post
leans splintered covered by last
year's vines this year's blooms
Fall's dusty apple crop
lost to silver mildew bane
Podosphaera Lencotricha*
*scientific name for powder mildew which infects apple trees
Version 1*
Crescent Moon sails
on a starry boat cloud
across Summer's sky
Version 2
A starry boat sails
in a sea of clouds guided
by the crescent moon
Version 3
Indigo fingers
weaving silvery moonlight
shines on white sail boats
Version 4
A thief in the night
stealing starry sailors' dreams
cloud boat floats aloft
Version 5
Carina's star keel
graces the Southern Cross caught
by Midnight's anchor
Crows ride the maize in
the old farmer's zigzagged maze
buttered corn awaits
Hunger's gnawing bite
during the Lenten fasting
chocolate-egg dreams
White spectre
fog enshrouds
weeping angel
Taking steps
towards open doors
school bell rings
Just for fun you can let me know in the comment section which version of the haiku designated by an *you like the best.None of them won anything but I thought I would include these min-haiku gems here.These are my entries in the st-kukai@haikuworld.org monthly contest.
I add my new haiku after the contest voting closes.This way I can keep them on PoemHunter for people to read..
For me, I enjoy the wording of the #2 varients, Lorraine, but such matters are only bound by selective taste. The flow from the colorless hidden to the colorful obvious moves me to appreciation of the nuance and the evolution evident in nature. Humans never blend so adeptly to our surroundings! Warm regards, John.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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4/19/2024 9:31:35 PM # 1.0.0.1119
Very much subtle you are writing. I like it. Thanking for your commentaries, I will leave three mixy (haiku) written for you - on the basis of your miniatures. It is your, but differently it I wrote. I am greeting. :) Maria Barbara Korynt ------------------- 1. the yellow lotus grows quickly crowned by stars shining on the sky 2. nodding the green reeds and now, turn brown in the sun, it smiling summer 3. dreams claim souls floating in the fresh colours rainbow chatters to deaf stone