Just Before Leaving Poem by Pranab K Chakraborty

Just Before Leaving



Nice, I touched
your loneliness

softiest palm
induced its warm
on your beads

amazing shock
shrieked your glass
broken pieces
stabbed my foot

floor much colored
loved our nagging
you never told
pain is your touching

loneliness bugled
the chaos of clearing
sojourn my palm
gone through the wind

chilled from nights dark
trapped the dew dropp

my whole my beauty-sick whole
put it on your breath

the silence...silently
again touched the Nice
told to myself

I battered your loneliness...

POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
Pranab k c
14/07/2012
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Rajnish Manga 17 November 2014

Pease give one more reading to the poem as a common reader and then decide whether it needs a fresh treatment.. The subject is very appealing but the impact is missing, Pranab.

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Allemagne Roßmann 17 July 2012

you never told pain is your touching -the central attention for lines in this poetry.Its never told coz` pain is immeasurable and there is no instrument scientifically designed to measure it.Pain is therefore untold.When you try to tell people of your pain, you are simply misconstrued coz what is literally painful in english means pain-Bread in French.When French are giving you bread, your pain could have well been hunger as understood but might be not that the one you hinted as pain.Nothing pays for the pain.Only silence and embarrassment.

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