Just Because. Poem by krystal hegarty

Just Because.



I will never be perfect
Like the girls who find a way.
No one will ever love me
With the scars that remain.
No one will ever keep me,
With the way they see me grieve.
No one will let me love them,
After they see me when they leave.
No one will ever find me,
Because my world is imaginary.
No one will ever see me,
The way they did before.
Just because I've been broken once,
Doesn't mean I won't love no more.

Sunday, June 18, 2017
Topic(s) of this poem: broken
POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
How i feel most days of going to school, ect... (Im very alone at school.)
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Jefferson Carter 18 June 2017

Krystal, this would be more effective if you used fewer abstract words (love, grieve, imaginary) and some vivid imagery, words that appeal to the various senses. Mary Oliver is a poet you might enjoy and be inspired by. If you have time, check out my new website: jeffersoncarterverse.com Tell me how you like it. Thanks. Yrs, JC

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Krystal Hegarty 19 June 2017

thanks for the feedback, I'll try to look at your website.

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