Just A Thought Poem by Lily Espinosa

Just A Thought

Rating: 2.8


My last few poems have been pretty dull,
All this self pity,
Quite unlike me,
It's not all bad,
Every now and then i get a taste of the old ways,
The happy days,
So i souldn't complain,
Loving family, great friends, a future leading anywhere,
All these things are going for me,
So really,
Things are good.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Lily Espinosa 04 June 2005

Oh my, you really are on fire! This isn't a poem is it? ..Could that be why i called it 'just a thought'? I don't know about you, but as a rule my thoughts do not include imagery, metaphors or similes..but hey. Thats just me.

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Raynette Eitel 02 June 2005

Glad you're feeling better...but still this is not a poem. (sorry to say.) This is reflective prose. Try some imagery, metaphors, similes, anything that will take this away from the route of prose. Raynette

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Lily Espinosa 31 May 2005

Well i've written so much depressing stuff lately, i was beginning to bring myself down! ..Thanks by the way.

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Graham Leese 31 May 2005

I can imagine writing something like this myself, well done on your latest output.

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