Is That Okay..... Poem by Valerie Dohren

Is That Okay.....

Rating: 4.4


Oh fare thee well
I`m off to hell -
A place may be
Reserved for me

But then, I smile,
I`ll wait awhile -
In case there`s space
In heaven`s place

But then, maybe
There`s nowhere free -
So here I`ll stay
Is that okay?

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Dave Walker 13 April 2012

Like it, a really great flowing poem.

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Heather Wilson 13 April 2012

O K with me Val, hope you stay a good long time.

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Joseph Anderson 15 April 2012

You made this old man laugh.A brief, cute and great flowinfg poem..Worth a ten

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Patti Masterman 15 April 2012

Ha, sorry for taking the last place in Hell- but I guess we should all stay here as long as possible, it's too interesting to forego, thanks for the laugh!

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G.R. Gaus 16 April 2012

In three short stanzas you have summed up all of the options, glad to hear that you've chosen the later, great piece of writing as always.....

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Walterrean Salley 18 November 2012

No, no! Don't go there. Please stay - in case there`s space in heaven`s place. I think you'll be be glad you did. Keep writing and inspiring Val. Thanks.

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John Brown 20 August 2012

Hee Hee Hee. This tickled me.

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Constance K Yost 20 August 2012

Yah, that's okay-for many a day. Constance Yost

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Juan Olivarez 22 April 2012

hearted and very witty. Well done.

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Adeline Foster 17 April 2012

Cute, cute and well expressed. Read mine - Indebted - Adeline

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