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Impasse!

I offer prayers
to God Almighty
renew the promise
of my soul
at every smallest
sin of life
repent, atone
and daily sign
the deal with devils
then ask forgiveness,
mercy sweet,
then daily gain
some fatal apple,
and daily lose my Paradise!

Submitted: Tuesday, May 14, 2013
Edited: Thursday, September 12, 2013


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Save us please God!
as the fall of Man is not the incident of history only, it is the daily occurence, moment by moment, some or the other man falls from the state of Grace, and consequently one or the other paradise is lost! ! !

Comments about this poem (Aao baaten karen! (Urdu) by Shahzia Batool )

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  • Amitava Sur (2/7/2014 11:05:00 PM)

    Sinning in human life is like the apple of Eve, with this we have to live...... very well written

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  • Passionate Reader (5/25/2013 2:17:00 PM)

    to err is human... we are human beings and not angels who would never commit a sin but it is always important to ask forgiveness from God! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! a very thoughtful poem, infact a prayer! ! ! you are blessed with a quality that enables you to communicate true feelings! ! ! God bless you.

  • Farah Ilyas (5/22/2013 12:57:00 PM)

    what a confeesional poem! verily one who ask for forgiveness Allah grant them what they want....fatal apple, again reminds us we are becoming victim of devil one way or another, only God protect us; holy poem, glad to see it

  • Indira Babbellapati (5/22/2013 12:26:00 PM)

    I look forward to the day we mortals are freed from the concept of sin...

  • S.zaynub Kamoonpuri (5/22/2013 1:04:00 AM)

    Ok tryin again. I said, brill creative how u say, fatal apple, true d darned forbiden fruit dat still lures man. Kudos behna.

  • S.zaynub Kamoonpuri (5/22/2013 1:00:00 AM)

    Ah coment not going!

  • Www.poemhunter.com/m-d-dinesh-nair-2 Search 2 (5/19/2013 12:48:00 AM)

    The very definition of the 'Paradise' has to be revised. Though as a poet you have full liberty to renew your promise to made to 'God', I would like to know whether it is man`s fault alone to be in this impasse?
    A new strain has been added to man`s miserable struggle since B.C 18000 when modern man began his different mission of life on a planet that would have just spun like any other planet for ever..
    Good human beings still survive and that is why this paradise is still habitable for most of us. The slaves know how to toil and Master may not.
    Please, take it light as my atheistic mindset has urged me to write like this.

  • Unwritten Soul (5/19/2013 12:31:00 AM)

    Only by asking forgiveness we may find ourselves to start new life,
    Sure He will forgives us, no matter how bad we are
    As we want to lose all bad and find a truth
    though we do commit sins everyday
    we always able to be forgiven
    as long as our love to Him
    not betrayed by things
    we are just human
    who can avoid from mistakes
    and because of love between us and God
    that make life forgiven and smooth...
    a pleasing write Shahzia_Soul

  • Tribhawan Kaul (5/18/2013 1:05:00 AM)

    A human is bound to make mistakes, seek forgiveness and then again go to commit sins. This vicious circle goes on. Had it not be so, a human would have been God Himself. However confessing the sin by the sinner may relieve one of his/her guilt but consequences of one's KARMA has to be faced The poem sums up the idea beautifully regarding committing and seeking forgiveness.

  • Yasmeen Khan (5/17/2013 2:48:00 PM)

    The one who makes confessions must be a very humble soul and Almighty is all forgiving to such people. I believe Shahzia you are the one.

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