Im Like Posion Poem by Aiyanna Ortiz

Im Like Posion



Everyone that i let into my life leaves
im like poison my love is tainted
father at 16 mother at 2
my closet brother three days ago
fighting for freedom whos freedom?
their fighting themselves like me
i lost everyone close to me
im not going to be lonely my whole
life but i will never depend on anyone
my heart is shattered in more then two pieces

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*Trusting You* 12 June 2009

fighting for freedom whos freedom? their fighting themselves like me that is a hard pill for me to swallow... um.. I like the thought of those lines I think that is fare to say... but freedom is real... I live it day by day. (thank you men and women) oh and everyone leaves... my big brother left 3 years ago and my dad died my mom left... so I sorta know how you feel. you will one day leave. good job. ~MC~

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Sydne Morris 12 June 2009

nice. i think you should elaborate more. but good job has great potential of being an awesome poem needs some work tho but good start

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