'...If You Want Me To' Poem by Janine Alyssa Navarro

'...If You Want Me To'

Rating: 4.0


They say
it's a wonderful
place.

I can't feel it
that much,
at the moment.

They say
it's all hearts
and stars.

I think I need
to bleed a bit
just to feel that.

There must be
something wrong
with this world.

Or maybe,
something was
wrong with me.

But then he said,
I'll fix this world up
if you want me to.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Deep Mukherjee 02 February 2012

the build up to the climax is as beautiful as it can get! ! ! end is beautiful too...but regarding your standard of writing; i think u could have created magic in the end! ! anyway a great write!

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Janine Alyssa Navarro

Janine Alyssa Navarro

Dubai, U.A.E.
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