Ideal Couple Poem by Mehta Hasmukh Amathaal

Ideal Couple

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Am I ready to leave?
Can I not believe?
Who can help me to be relieved?
Why do I stand as connived?

It all started with fun fare
I was ready to lead here anywhere
I chose her to be my better half
Was that joke or simple laugh?

I did what I was supposed to
I expected her to fall through
We were to be one in all our drive
We were to make it heaven and live

I swore in the name of God
With all sincerity and high hopes rode
Let destiny prove my sincerity
Life was to be made of good quality’

No one may notice what we achieved?
They will only observe how much we missed?
It is altogether not our concern to think
We may vow to swim together and sink

I shall worry about better tomorrow
Fall in line with and good steps to allow
Hand in hand with confidence to walk along
Not to find faults even if one is wrong

Strive very hard to reach out for each other
Taking all steps for storms to wither
Bridging gap and creating confidence
Clear lines with drawing inference

We may come to be known as ideal pair
Not playing only music around the chair
Something more to make it worthy and worthwhile
Continue to look for good and live in peace meanwhile

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Chand Shikari 23 July 2010

Am I ready to leave? Can I not believe? Who can help me to be relieved? Why do I stand as connived? ....ideal one....10

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Should be required reading for all those who plan to take the vow of marriage. Well done my friend.

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Dr.ram Mehta 03 March 2010

A good narrative poem with elaborate rhyming

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Gautam Sen 03 March 2010

A good poem of well vowed expression. An apt title to it has worthies to prove the ideal promises made through the entire piece. Rhymes were given much attention throughout your writing and so some words here and there seems to be little awkward - we may swim or we sink...(for us it should be drown na?) However, its a very good poem and reading was a pleasure indeed. Thanks for sharing. Gautam

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Mehta Hasmukh Amathaal

Mehta Hasmukh Amathaal

Vadali, Dist: - sabarkantha, Gujarat, India
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