Valerie Dohren

Silver Star - 3,194 Points (13 January 1947 / Southport)

I Wrote A Poem Poem by Valerie Dohren


I wrote a poem
a simple poem
from a simple mind -
it languished in obscurity
and then I dared to set it free
though ‘twas not well designed.

(Through the ether then it fluttered
‘Off it goes’ I glibly muttered) .

I wrote a poem
a simple poem
from a simple mind –
I should have thought it better kept
this poem written so inept
but I was sadly blind.

(How will my poem be received,
hopeful, but yet self-deceived) .

I wrote a poem
a simple poem
from a shattered heart
and though it was a simple theme
it was the one and only dream
I wished then to impart.

(Will my poem be understood
and will ‘they’ think it bad or good) .

I wrote a poem
a simple poem
writ’ through tearful eyes -
it fell upon a stony ground
lay writhing, turning round and round,
not ever set to rise.

(It seems it did not make the grade
as on the ground it still is laid) .

I wrote a poem
a simple poem
from a simple mind –
I guess it was a big faux pas
and as it was my coup de grace
it’s to the bin consigned …..

oh yes, it’s to the bin consigned!

Submitted: Wednesday, March 12, 2014
Edited: Thursday, March 13, 2014

Topic of this poem: Poetry


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  • Freshman - 532 Points Juan Olivarez (4/29/2014 9:06:00 PM)

    Well I for one give it a ten. Lovely structure
    Great read as always. (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 715 Points Shahzia Batool (4/13/2014 1:41:00 AM)

    The second read is again wonderful with such a comment by Danny Draper...i feel i am thinking the same what you said in the poem! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 347 Points Danny Draper (4/5/2014 6:57:00 PM)

    This is a great reflective poem of some resignation and honest reflection. Not every poem will be a gem and as with visual artists should sometimes be considered as sketches of incomplete ideas or fanciful notions or whimsies or emotional outbursts of distress as therapy that are for us alone first and foremost that we dare to share baring our hearts and vulnerable souls. And yet we should know that not all is polished and not all is sound and yet we tipped the useful box of ingredients squarely on the ground. We let its parts fall and lie where they may and gather them in through tear blurred eyes to construct abstract or deliberate Lego style this amorphis to accrete and display. A great honest poem with fine use of repetition like nagging thoughts that return to torment and can be far more destructive than any external jibes. Terrific effort. (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,371 Points Patricia Grantham (3/31/2014 10:05:00 AM)

    Simple but elegantly written. It is the simple things in life
    that means the most. very good Val. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 315 Points Ruth Walters (3/24/2014 1:35:00 PM)

    I like this poem too, how often, perhaps, have truly great poems thought too poor or simple by the writer been consigned to the bin.........sometimes when I write and post a poem that I think is pretty ordinary I'm amazed at the response it receives and then at other times I feel a poem deserves better praise but it gets none which only goes to prove that art or beauty is truly in the eye of the beholder :) (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 68 Points Susy Evelyne (3/22/2014 6:39:00 AM)

    Enjoyed the honesty and creative originality of this one, Valerie. You speak for many poets here. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 55 Points John Brown (3/18/2014 12:48:00 PM)

    Intriguing Val. You've got us all thinking now. (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,478 Points Diane Hine (3/17/2014 6:26:00 AM)

    The repetitions and asides make this a fascinating poem to read. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 9,232 Points Mr. Nobody (3/17/2014 12:15:00 AM)

    For every one that hits the bin, two more are birthed from thin,
    air! (from your talented heart and mind!)

    thanks, MORE, MORE! (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 715 Points Shahzia Batool (3/16/2014 7:45:00 AM)

    A beautiful poem written with a strong hint of poetic modesty! there's beauty in this simplicity! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 5,850 Points Tirupathi Chandrupatla (3/15/2014 11:20:00 AM)

    I wrote a poem
    a simple poem
    from a simple mind
    Best poems are written with a simple mind. Let no poem go to the bin. Let it be saved, looked at again to edit. It wil then turn into something worth sharing. Thank you for a beautiful poem. (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,577 Points Dinesh Nair (3/15/2014 6:53:00 AM)

    When these lines proclaim that you have written THAT POEM it makes me sit wondering as to when you will write another POEM to excel it, Val. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Barbara Nixon (3/14/2014 6:32:00 AM)

    I love this poem, very cleverly written. Great write! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 352 Points Sreelekha Premjit (3/14/2014 3:00:00 AM)

    Great poem, Valerie.. Each poem you write has a life of its own.. and you write not a simple poem, but the thought that flashes through the mind of every poet.. thanks for writing this.. (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,652 Points Dave Walker (3/13/2014 11:13:00 AM)

    Every time I write a poem it's on it's way to the bin, but then I always have second thoughts
    and post it. A great poem. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 19,313 Points Valsa George (3/12/2014 11:46:00 PM)

    it fell upon a stony ground
    lay writhing, turning round and round,
    not ever set to rise.

    Great imagination! I am sure it shall resurrect! ! Enjoyed much! ! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 12,593 Points Sandra Feldman (3/12/2014 4:43:00 PM)

    Very good and different, did not stay in the bin after all
    .Loved the French at the end , fit in so well and was certainly very A propos (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 13,881 Points * Sunprincess * (3/12/2014 4:41:00 PM)

    ......dear val, your poems are fabulous...your poems are fantastic....your poems are some of the best poems I have ever read....I love your writings...you have made my day... if you actually wrote a simple poem and trashed it....then feel free to message it to me I will post it as mine....enjoyed this lovely write.. (Report) Reply

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