Freespirit Juneja

Rookie - 3 Points (09 Aug 1983 / New Delhi)

I Kept On Walking


I Kept On Walking

Fixed my eyes on the world
Strived to be a free bird
Kept aside all the herds
To be a man,
who does the talking
I kept on walking

My aims were like a beautiful sky
Its zenith required more than a try
Ordeal ahead was free from lies
Had to finish before the soul dies
My honest deeds did the talking
Without a hush, I kept on walking

Leaping all the tumbling stones
Beaming despite breaking my bones
I 'd to cover the journey alone
To be a Man
who does the talking
I kept on walking

Suddenly, my journey got tied
Besides me danced my bride
All my aims got flayed
New foundation need to be laid
Problems kept on flocking
And still, I kept on walking

My life became totally shallow
Dragged into deathly hallows
Then God brightened the day
When my baby had the say
Negating being its ultimate prey
I started the journey afresh
Kept all my aims suppressed

And I just kept on walking
Till the heavens came knocking

Submitted: Saturday, March 10, 2012
Edited: Tuesday, February 24, 2015

Topic of this poem: life


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It's about the life of a common man....

Comments about this poem (I Kept On Walking by Freespirit Juneja )

  • Rookie - 15 Points Swetha Vanakayalapati (6/29/2012 7:44:00 AM)

    My aims were like a beautiful sky
    Its zenith required more than a try
    Ordeal ahead was free from lies
    Had to finish before this soul dies
    My honest deeds were doing the talking
    Without a hush, i kept on walking

    My life became totally shallow
    Dragging into deathly hallows
    Then the god brightened the day
    When my baby had the say
    Negating being its ultimate prey
    I started the journey afresh
    Keeping all my aims suppressed
    I kept on walking
    Till the heavens came knocking

    the truths set the tone of the poem which have been furnished with ease and the grief behind the dream and aim have worked out so perfect........right from your heart! ! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Erika Michelle (6/10/2012 2:16:00 PM)

    up in the third paragraph i reccomend you switch the wording to: beaming despite my breaking bones. just a little suggestion (: i enjoyed the journey theme, it's a good message, never let your head down. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Aman Sa (5/13/2012 1:33:00 PM)

    striking and powerful and a rhythmic song...much to provide...loved ur creation (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,092 Points Unwritten Soul (4/27/2012 11:48:00 AM)

    The will power in your body protect your soul to be durable in any condition, the sensation of self embrace even hurt or tormented bold but you still standing to keep walking....so never stop in any reason for your life move smoothly in any challenge in future. Beautiful write Sharad! ! ! ! _Unwritten Soul (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Laura Nnamdi (4/24/2012 12:53:00 PM)

    Awesome! It really captivated me, nd am inspired. Keep on walking dude and never stop believing! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Shaurya Singh (4/22/2012 10:31:00 PM)

    Excellent description... (Report) Reply

  • Rookie teal Sky (4/20/2012 10:09:00 AM)

    the refrain of the poem is awesome, it rhymes, it conveys a message, it adorns the poem.
    and the message you've conveyed, i think is inspiring too.
    the poem gives a hint of self confidence while making a line with over confidence.
    you kept on walking,
    i say, you must keep on writing. (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,183 Points Valerie Dohren (4/15/2012 6:12:00 AM)

    The poem is essentially very good - there are two words I would change, however, these being `gawking` and `nerds.` Perhaps instead of `gawking` you could replace this with `fixing`, and `nerds` maybe could be replaed with `herds` if you want to maintain the rhyme. (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,650 Points Dave Walker (4/14/2012 11:40:00 AM)

    A great poem, like it. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Blossom Mist (4/14/2012 8:43:00 AM)

    a very nice expression of what happens to a person.. amazing work.... :) (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 7,515 Points Neela Nath (4/14/2012 3:06:00 AM)

    Life is a journey.woven with delight and woe.Whatever comes on our way we have to pass it. This is the philosophy of life. Very nice write! Good diction. Poetic vision? Aha! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Benjamin Jansen (4/11/2012 3:51:00 PM)

    solid piece of writing man. true as can be. from the heart. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Fico Espiritu (4/11/2012 9:39:00 AM)

    A very nice poem. The thought flows softly like an unimpeded free flowing stream. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie isabella Francis (4/8/2012 9:34:00 AM)

    Classic piece of poetry. Loved it. :) (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 12 Points Sanu Puthupallil (4/8/2012 4:26:00 AM)

    amazing poem......really a great work (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 12 Points Sanu Puthupallil (4/8/2012 4:25:00 AM)

    amazing poem......really a great work (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Anubhuti Modi (4/7/2012 6:52:00 AM)

    a true story of a common man (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 114 Points SWETA LEENA PANDA (4/6/2012 9:20:00 PM)

    nice poem, , , i really like the way of writing this poem... :)) (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 10 Points Cody Maxie (4/6/2012 8:18:00 PM)

    Good read, keep up the writing, you have a knack for it :) (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 6 Points Connor Whyte (4/5/2012 3:24:00 PM)

    Sad writing but very good work. (Report) Reply

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