I Give You This Poem by Stan Petrovich

I Give You This

Rating: 5.0


There as searing beauty in the air
You breath. The is viscous tartar
In the teeth I leave.
No one can be wiser than the
Man who has worn it all,
Close to his chest.
I have worn nothing but diffident
Bequests.
So, you are better than all the rest.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Shadow Girl 23 August 2011

Perfect 10 SG.............poetic licence don't worry about commas..who needs their writing constricted by such things!

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Adeline Foster 22 August 2011

No one can be wiser than the Man who has worn it all Close to his chest. This is a great line containing both metaphor, hyperbole and wisdom. Note please, no comma after ‘all’. The second line: could you mean? Your breath. There is viscous tarter Adeline

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Stan Petrovich

Stan Petrovich

Fort Riley, KS
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